first thing I’ll point out for constructive criticism is that the dialogue right at the beginning seems a little bit redundant. after saying that Mrs.Tulip welcomes him she says “Welcome”, it seems a bit unnecessary to me

really love the second paragraph thing. I love how straightforward this writing is, gives it a cool tone I think

this dialogue exchange between the boys is SO GOOD!

I feel like it’s hard to get dialogue to flow well, but you did it so well

woah. the ending. I WANT TO KNOW MORE ABOUT THIS PLACE AND THESE TEACHERS!

this is such a cool idea, I really loved this! thank you so much for entering!

also, for a little more constructive criticism, I think that adding a few more details about the setting could make this even better. what you have now if perfectly fine, but adding more certainly wouldn’t hurt :)

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