🎤31/3/22🎤
having mixed feelings abt posting this,
but like I promised here’s the full poem :)
it was a bit too long and so, I had to split it. would love feedback and/or criticism on the poem <3 
part 2 & more in remixes + background info in comments

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🎤31/3/22🎤 having mixed feelings abt posting this, but like I promised here’s the full poem :) it was a bit too long and so, I had to split it. would love feedback and/or criticism on the poem <3 part 2 & more in remixes + background info in comments


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🎤part 1🎤: this part was more on comparing men and women/boys and girls. I’m sure that many of you were told by your parents that oh blue is meant for boys and pink is meant for girls. well, that’s a stereotype and isn’t true. colours have no gender and we can all love whatever we want. I think this part is also meant for the guys in some way because I don’t want anyone to be put down by anyone like your parents or relatives etc that you can’t love and do what you want and you have to follow certain “rules” that don’t rlly exist honestly. and this part is also on women’s rights in everything, women should be given the same opportunity like men in everything, like in education and work opportunities. idk if most of you know but recently, the taliban government allowed the Afghanistan girls to go back to sch and have the same opportunity as the guys. but after 2 days, they “changed” their mind and decided not to give girls those education rights. which is wrong, ridiculously wrong. some women went to protest and guess what :) Afghanistan women now can only travel with a MALE RELATIVE. they can’t go out of the country by themselves LIKE WTH WHERE ARE OUR RIGHTS, WHY CANT THEY GO BY THEMSELVES. WOMEN CAN STAND UP FOR THEMSELVES. we don’t need a man to “protect” us. that’s for the first 3 stanzas of part 1. for the second last stanza, i think many ppl tend to say all those things to women so I thought it would be good to speak it out, that it’s wrong and not always true :) you’re the voice of yourself, speak up for yourself and love yourself always <33
🗝part 2🗝: you’re the key to everything. this is more of a POV through a young women, ever since she was growing up. she was controlled by her family members (parents, relatives) and did whatever she was told to, just to please them even tho she didn’t like it. but eventually, she learnt that she needed to stand up for herself, that she is the one that should decide for her own future, find the key to her own purpose. so the first 2 stanzas, it’s the “story” of her struggling deep inside, wanting to be free, to spread her wings like a butterfly, breaking free from a cocoon. it also shows that her struggling to be herself, under the controls of others. and then eventually, in the last 2 stanzas, she finally gains the courage to stand up for herself and be who she finally wants to be :) hope that this is understandable and hope you enjoyed the theme overall!! it was fun doing this honestly and I think it helped me to be more productive when it came to posting. please give me feedback on the theme and the poem itself, tysm if u do <3!! oh and if u don’t understand the background info, I’ll try my best to explain it to you better.
wowwww this is amazing! you write so good!🤩✋
love it!
WHOA LYLY
I love this poem it’s so meaningful and deep and really hits me
this is amazing!!!
WOW THIS IS AMAZING
love the poem and the meaning behind it! it’s just SPECTACULAR 💕🤩
OMG THIS IS SO GOOD
Your writing is immaculate Lyly
i could never write like this
hehe HOOO
ONG THIS IS REALLYYY GOOOODDDD
OO THIS IS SO COOL
it’s always so impressive when ppl are good at poetry because I feel like writing is so hard lol
also it’s so cool with the repetition in each of the paragraphs, it rlly ties it all together
ahh I love part two as well! I think it’s probably my fav of the two :) I like how it kind of reads like a story, I thought it was super interesting
wow. no words this was beautiful lyly and thank you for writing it <3 it definitely reminded me of this one time where my teacher said “girls can hit guys because jt DOESNT hurt, but guys can’t hit girls.” and I was like bruh- can we maybe just not hit each other?
speaking of which, fun fact: pink was actually a masculine color until the 1940s!
lyly this is amazing, and you're totally right by saying that we all somehow grew up with these stupid stereotypes, but what matters now is being able of leaving them behind! i love the message behind the poem, great job😊💗
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This is amazing!!!!
You write so well, keep going, many people see a future in you!!
OMG WAIT
DID YOU REALIZE YOU MADE IT TO 1K OR AM I JUST EXTREMELY LATE
EITHER WAY CONGRATSSSS I KNOW THAT WAS A LONG TIME GOAL FOR YOU 🥳🥳🥳
This is incredible!! The whole message is so great and you word it so well ❤
This actually reminds me of the time I was playing basketball WITH THE GUYS from the school I play sports at, and we were doing a scrimmage and I wrestled one of the bous, down and hard on the floor for the ball, stole it and scored a lay-up, and they whole boys team looked at me in astonishment and looked back at the boy I was playing basketball with, and they all started laughing at him saying, "hahaha! You just got beat by a GIRL😂." And I didn't say anything, but like, Girl
? GIRL?! SO WHAT? WHO CARES? I'm just as tough ad the rest of you! Heck, I'm taller and stronger then most of them! It made me very frustrated, like who CARES if im a girl, I can still be tougher and stronger and bigger and faster then you. Its not that easy to be taller, faster, bigger OR stronger then me.
Sorry for all the typos
You have an incredible way with words! Keep doing what you’re doing!
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OMG YESS OFC I REMEMBER YOU!! THIS IS AMAZING AS ALWAYS!!!
HELLO!?!? THIS IS SO GOOD ??
@caption: oml I didn’t know that they had to travel with a man. that’s awful :( this is so good !! im obsessed with your writing <3
this is so good!! wonderful job in conveying your message <33
This writing is amazing!
This is soooo good!!!!! I love this poem so much and can relate to it on some many different levels. How people in general still think that we aren’t good enough or as strong as males. Thank you so much for this!!!
FANTASTIC❤️❤️
Thank you so much!!
Yeah it's kinda a story, but with two poem parts inside. I love to mix story and poetry, like it just comes so well together sometimes :)
these poems are beautiful, you’re an amazing writer and poet like I can feel the emotion and meaning behind each word. I relate to part one a LOT, I never fit in with my gender stereotype when I was younger and it was always hammered into me by my school and parents I could only like and do certain things because if it. I really háte how stereotypes are still around today, and some people are so strict on them. we’re all people with our own opinions and personality, not all girls are gonna like unicorns and not all boys are gonna like cars
re//: thank you!!! I really need to work on my expressions lol- and oo it’s clearly exam time, i hope you do well in yours too, the best of luck to you!!! and yeaH I’m trying my best to reply to everyone loL please don’t hurt me :’) /j
I’m pretty sure it’s fixed now, I can see my profile, my remixes and everything so woo. and hmM you can steal him for a short time then
aw thank you Lyly!!!
lyly...it's nice to meet you. How long have you been on PC?
hey lyly!! don't worry, it's no trouble at all! I'll take my time with the icon requests and so far i don't really have many☺️💖 so if you want one go ahead and fill out the form, I'd be happy to make it for u🥰
You inspired me to add the doodles to the collage, and it was originally inspired by the collage you made inspired by -thebearwiththepetals-, so I gave credit to both :)
that’s okay don’t worry!!! thank you!! and we can collab of course!! whenever you’re ready :)
LYLY ITS BEEN SO LONG HOW HAVE YOU BEEN?
OMG NO WAY !!
I THINK RIGHT NOW IT IS KISS AND TELL. BUT I ABSOLUTELY ADORE COLORBLIND AND LONDON
WHAT ABOUT YOU
EITHER WAY TYSM LYLY ! I didn't draw the picture unfortunately, that's beyond my skill level :,). I wish though! I didn't think that font could look good either, but I was playing around with all caps and thought "whoa, it looks like a fairy tale font :0" that was the whole vibe I was going for too--
thank you Lyly! 🥺❤️
ahahahah thank you lyly!!💕😊
AHHH THANK U STOPPPP
nahh ur comments always get me like hello I remember thinking u were so cool and like now we’re friends LIKE THAT’S STILL MIND-BLOWING TO ME TO THIS DAY-
of course <3💘
thank you, that really means a lot <33
THANK YOU that means everything
great googly moogly this is powerful
i love the writing style, and the message⚔️ 1000/10
Haha don't worry it's nice to see your excitement :)
Thank you so much lyly ❤
Yess!! I've had the tickets for like 2 year now? And it's finally happening. I've seen them live before so I just know it will be amazing. And yes they're my fav band, it's sweet that you remember :)
Yeah there are almost no covid restrictions left, so it's kinda nice, but also kinda weird haha
yes ofc I remember that haha
it's true though, a lot of people on this app are just kids who don't know about stuff like that
yes thank you, I'm trying my best, but I don't know how much longer I can stay :/
i am, i hope you are too 💛
thank you ☺️ i’m not completely new, I’ve had a few accs in the past and then I lose the motivation to make collages, but hopefully I’ll be making more now :) thank you for the welcome 🤗🤗
unfortunately I deleted them, but I still have the collages haha. I used to have an account called elixir- and then briiiinumaki was my most recent. my name is brianna :)
ahh omg you’re so sweet that made me feel so happy!! ah it sucks I must have been inactive when you joined, but hey I’m back woohoo
ah yes 🤦‍♀️ I remember now haha
Yeah it's kinda weird to be around people again haha. I feel like summer will be fine, but I'm scared everything will just get worse again when fall comes around.
thank you so much!!!!