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And this is done but anymore suggestions I'll add and thanks especially to corpie and chaloure for helping

battery at 1

also the pimples and wrinkles part I forgot , I'm fixing that later probably

NO "is" in the first sentence

no "that" after image

comma after "Furthermore"

shiny, plastic, and their

their faces are flawless

with no pores, pimples, or wrinkles

to make sure YOU'RE

no comma after struggle (put it after body image)

state where you found your stat in brackets ex. (University of Oxford study, 2011)

say images of models

don't start a sentence with "So"

don't need the "of" for images of people in the...

sentence about girls and guys (one i'm talking about above) is too long, need to break that up into 2 or 3

the reasons above, not above reasons

period after excersize

tell the reader what they're mind is being distracted from

say something like focus on healthy eating instead of nutrition

space between: media.Because

and also you can never start a sentence with because fyi^^

need a concluding statement!!!

and use put in other words for media because you use it a lot

it's really close to being a really good paragraph!

when is it due??

thanks❤️

this is really well written

I dare you to post a post saying that you love Justin Bieber and want to marry him 😂

wat you doin?

after 'shinny and plastic' put a period before there

^also use their instead of 'there' as you're referring to someone

in the very last sentence take out 'Because' and start the sentence with 'Then' because you're using 'because' later on in the sentence too

after 'pores' put a comma and before 'pimples'

thanks :)

idk if anyone's said this but if you've already said 'in addition' you don't need to have also in the same sentence 🙃

wow u obv need a lot of help