Collage by _Reverie_Extras


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No worries about the editing, I feel ya there! ✨ this is an incredible little clip of a story! I’m hooked already! Honestly, you had me from the first sentence “it is a cruel affair.” Such a cool line to start with! This whole thing reads very smoothly which I love and definitely isn’t always easy to do. You make the short sentences fit nicely which is something I know I struggle with! For constructive criticism, I really don’t have much. I think the main thing I noticed was the line about the scars. “Scars of what has yet to come” doesn’t really make sense to me, because scars typically mark things of the past. Maybe clarify that a bit more? Obviously that’s nothing major, but I really don’t have anything else. This is great! Thank you so much for entering!