forgot to say this but yk by: Ellie

Wow! This is so good! I love the plot and see that there’s so much potential for where this story could go! You have some really great sentences in here that caught my eye, like the second sentence for one. I love the ending, that dialogue at the end is a great cliff hanger! I want to know what happens next! For suggestions, I think there’s some structural and grammatical things that could be improved. At one point in the middle, you describe the spells in stuff by saying “you”, but I think saying “her” would probably fit the situation better. And maybe try to say Wrens name less. This is something I struggle with a lot when using 3rd person and I think it just takes practice to figure it out, but other than that this is really good! Thank you so much for entering, I loved reading it!